托福写作开头切莫大意：举例分析

 　　托福写作开头切莫大意：举例分析

　　1、废话连篇急煞读者失败案例：

　　This topic is very interesting. I am very interested in talking about this topic. Because I am also a college student and I am not married……修改方案：开门见山 直奔主题In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married。

　　2、观点不明态度暧昧失败案例：

　　I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……3、渐行渐远 离题千里失败案例：

　　I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places。

　　4、中式英语人见人跪失败案例：

　　In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there。

　　Topic3- Is there fairness¹ in today’

　　I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chop² when I go out buy things……Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a person always does bad things, he will get “baoying”。

　　5、语法错误惨不忍睹失败案例：

　　About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility³. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should。

　　6、过分简单没有重点失败案例：

　　This issue⁴ is surely⁵ very important, let’

　　7、用词不当表达不准失败案例：

　　I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family。

　　8、意思重复徘徊不前失败案例：

　　My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits⁶ to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society。

　　9、中国俗语随心翻译失败案例：

　　I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……正确说法：

　　We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……Topic 3- Do you think one’

　　Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix⁷ born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”。

　　10、观点武断脱离实际失败案例：

　　In my opinion, confidence⁸ is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’

　　I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’

　　以上从许多学生的托福独立作文中总结出来、并参照了一些教材得出的托福写作考试中需避免的开头方式，希望考生们引以为戒。

1 fairness   

n.公平，正直，美好，明亮，清晰，适当，顺利性

参考例句：

• Their reputation for fairness is a matter for pride.他们公正的名声令他们引以为豪。
• Her sunburnt skin accentuates the fairness of her hair.她那晒黑了的皮肤突出了她的一头金发。

2 chop   

n.厚肉片，排骨，砍，交换，戳记，商标；vt.剁碎，砍，切，割断；vi.砍，突然转向

参考例句：

• He struck off the branch with a single chop of the ax.他一斧子就砍掉了那根树枝。
• She cut down the seedling with one chop.她一刀就把小苗砍倒了。

3 responsibility   

n.责任，职责

参考例句：

• The safety of the ship is the captain's responsibility.确保船的安全是船长的责任。
• The matter is outside my area of the responsibility.此事超出我的责任范围。

4 issue   

n.出版，发行，（报刊等）期、号，论点，问题，结果， （水，血等的）流出；vt.使流出，放出，发行（钞票等），发布（命令），出版（书等）发给；vi.发行，流出，造成...结果，进行辩护，传下

参考例句：

• I bought the book the day after its issue.这书出版后的第一天，我就去买了它。
• I'll support her down the line on that issue.在那个问题上我将全力支持她。

5 surely   

adv.确实地，无疑地；必定地，一定地

参考例句：

• It'should surely be possible for them to reach an agreement.想必他们可以达成协议。
• Surely we'll profit from your work.我们肯定会从你的工作中得到益处。

6 benefits   

n.津贴费；利益( benefit的名词复数 )；（给职工的）奖金；救济金；益处

参考例句：

• economic benefits accruing to the country from tourism 旅游业为该国带来的经济效益
• The article enthused about the benefits that the new system would bring. 本文热情赞扬了新制度将带来的好处。

7 phoenix   

n.凤凰，长生(不死)鸟；引申为重生

参考例句：

• The airline rose like a phoenix from the ashes.这家航空公司又起死回生了。
• The phoenix worship of China is fetish worship not totem adoration.中国凤崇拜是灵物崇拜而非图腾崇拜。

8 confidence   

n.信任，信托，自信，信心，把握，大胆，厚颜，过于自信，狂妄

参考例句：

• We have full confidence in our victory.我们有必胜的把握。
• I should like to exchange a few words with you in confidence.我想私下和你交换点意见。