托福写作中网购类作文小评

 　　这里，首先给出一些有关网购使用的例句：

　　1. e-shopping is fast and convenient.^网上购物快捷方便。

　　2. we can buy all kinds of things online.^我们可以在网上购买各种东西。

　　3. e-bay is a large shopping website.^e-bay是一个大型购物网站。

　　4. when e-shopping， pay particular attention to safekeeping your account information.^网上购物时，特别注意你账户信息的安全。

　　5. before e-shopping， be sure that you know all the details of the article.^网上购物前，确信你知道物品的所有细节。

　　6. you should check your goods carefully after receiving it.^收到货物之后，你要仔细检查你的物品。

　　7. shop on reliable websites.^在可信赖的网站交易(购物)。

　　8. shopping online is a bargain because you can always get a discount.^网上购物都是便宜货，因为你总可以得到打折的机会。

　　9. i am not particularly keen¹ on e-shopping.^我不是非常热衷于网上购物。

　　10. e-shopping has the potential danger of being cheated.^网上购物有被骗的潜在危险。

　　11. one of the disadvantages of e-shopping is that you are not able to see the commodity² until you receive it.^网上购物的缺点之一就是，在你收到商品之前你不可能看到它。

　　12. i prefer shopping in a traditional way to e-shopping.^较之网上购物，我更喜欢以传统方式购物。

　　范文：Today Life becoming more busy，people don't have enough time for shopping.So， they prefer online shopping that becoming more popular.But everything has two aspects like a coin has two sides， darker and brighter side. Same On line shopping has its drawbacks³ as well as its benefits.

　　People can purchase everything from staying at home.They will not have to go outside for buying things. So， there will be less traffic congestion⁴ and pollution will decrease that is good for saving⁵ our environment.For example，In my country(India) there is more pollution as a result quantity of oxygen is going down.So on line shopping is the best way to reduce pollution. This will also good for IT graduates because there will be more jobs in IT field but it will pay the bad effect on other qualified⁶ people.As a result unemployment may climb up. I give u a real example of my brother， He did his job in a company but he lost it 5 months ago due to less knowledge of computer. Even he got master degree but those person who appointed has only IT diploma.So on line shopping helps to rise unemployment.

　　As a conclusion， Its advantages are overweight its disadvantages. But government can reduce these disadvantages also， if he gives other jobs to unemployed⁷ people.

 

1 keen   

adj.热心的；敏锐的；激烈的；锋利的

参考例句：

• There is keen competition between the two motorcar firms.两家汽车公司之间存在着激烈的竞争。
• The children are mad keen to go to the zoo.孩子们非常想去动物园。

2 commodity   

n.日用品，商品，物品

参考例句：

• The authorities took measures to roll commodity price back.当局采取措施使物价全面回降。
• Commodity prices remain stable and there are plenty of goods on the market.商品价格稳定，市场货源充足。

3 drawbacks   

缺点，不利条件，障碍( drawback的名词复数 )

参考例句：

• The house had many drawbacks, most notably its price. 这房子有很多缺陷，尤其是它的价格。
• This method has quite a few drawbacks. 这种做法弊病不少。

4 congestion   

n.阻塞，消化不良

参考例句：

• The congestion in the city gets even worse during the summer.夏天城市交通阻塞尤为严重。
• Parking near the school causes severe traffic congestion.在学校附近泊车会引起严重的交通堵塞。

5 saving   

n.节省，节约；[pl.]储蓄金，存款

参考例句：

• Energy saving is term strategic policy of our country.节约能源是我国长期的战略国策。
• Old-fashioned housewives were usually very saving.旧时的家庭主妇通常都很节俭。

6 qualified   

adj.合格的，有资格的，胜任的，有限制的

参考例句：

• He is qualified as a complete man of letters.他有资格当真正的文学家。
• We must note that we still lack qualified specialists.我们必须看到我们还缺乏有资质的专家。

7 unemployed   

adj.失业的，没有工作的；未动用的，闲置的

参考例句：

• There are now over four million unemployed workers in this country.这个国家现有四百万失业人员。
• The unemployed hunger for jobs.失业者渴望得到工作。