2013年2月16日雅思写作范文

 　　小作文 ：柱状图，84年、94年、04年，the bar chart shows the rating of five factors for a good manager in three separate years.

　　写作思路： 动态图表，按照时间顺序描述趋势，按照factor的顺序做对比。

　　大作文 ：Some people think all lawbreakers should be taken into prison, others believe that there are better alternatives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

　　写作思路：

　　第一段： 如果对待罪犯：监狱还是其他措施?

　　第二段： 监狱的作用

　　1. 保证社会安全

　　2. 警示他人

　　但是：耗费资源多，罪犯出狱后难以重新进入社会

　　第三段： 其他措施包括教育，职业培训，工作

　　1. 可以帮助出狱后经济独立，防止重复犯罪

　　2. 认识到自己对社会的价值，提高自尊自信

　　第四段： 我不否认监狱的作用，但是如果没有教育和工作的帮助，罪犯难以彻底得到改造。

　　As repeated crimes occur increasingly, how to reform criminals has given rise to a debate. Certainly prison is the place for them to be punished and reformed. But other measures are also needed to achieve an optimal¹ result for them and the society as well.

　　It is undeniable that putting criminals into prison would contribute to a lower crime rate.Primarily, as offenders² are isolated⁴ from the society when they are in prison, they cannot threaten the social security any more. Longer prison term would also be a serious warning forpotential criminals However, this way of punishment means that more prisons and man power as well as other resources are required, which can be a huge cost for the government. Besides, after being isolated from the society for a really long time, offenders would find it very hard to re-entrythe society and this may force them to commit crime again.

　　Hence, it is better to find alternative ways to deal with criminals. Vocational training and academic education aimed at prisoners are promising⁵ ones. These measures could help equip those behind bars with job skills and become independent economically after they are set free. They would find the opportunity to escape the cycle of violence and poverty utterly⁶. For those criminals with special talents, working is a better way to reform them because they may have chance to realize their value to the society and regain⁷ self-respect and self-confidence. Theseapproaches would make a difference in criminal rehabilitation⁸, and generate a better effect than simply throwing offenders behind the iron bars.

　　Overall, I do not deny the function of prison in punishing felons¹⁰ and deterring¹² crime. However this cannot turn them into law abiding¹³ members without the aid of other measures, such as education, training and working.

　　词汇拓展：

　　1. occur 发生

　　2. reform 改造

　　3. given rise to 引起

　　4. optimal 最佳的

　　5. undeniable 不可否认的

　　6. crime rate 犯罪率

　　7. contribute to 导致

　　8. Primarily 主要的是

　　9. Offender= those behind bars= felon⁹ 罪犯

　　10. Isolate³ 隔离

　　11. prison term 刑期

　　12. security 安全

　　13. warn 敬告

　　14. potential 潜在的，可能的

　　15. re-entry 重新进入

　　16. commit crime 犯罪

　　17. law abiding 遵守法律

　　18. alternative 其他的

　　19. deal with 应对

　　20. Vocational training 职业教育

　　21. promising 有希望的

　　22. measure 措施

　　23. set free 释放

　　24. escape 逃脱

　　25. cycle 循环

　　26. utterly 彻底地

　　27. regain 重新获得

　　28. approach 方法

　　29. make a difference 有作用

　　30. rehabilitation 改过迁善

　　31. generate 产生

　　32. deter¹¹ 阻止

　　33. turn …into 把…变成

　　34. Hence 因此

1 optimal   

adj.最适宜的；最理想的；最令人满意的

参考例句：

• What is the optimal mix of private and public property rights in natural resources?私人和国家的自然资源产权的最适宜的组合是什么？
• Optimal path planning is a key link for the sailing contest.帆船最优行驶路径规划是帆船比赛取胜的关键环节。

2 offenders   

n.冒犯者( offender的名词复数 )；犯规者；罪犯；妨害…的人（或事物）

参考例句：

• Long prison sentences can be a very effective deterrent for offenders. 判处长期徒刑可对违法者起到强有力的威慑作用。
• Purposeful work is an important part of the regime for young offenders. 使从事有意义的劳动是管理少年犯的重要方法。

3 isolate   

vt.使孤立，隔离

参考例句：

• Do not isolate yourself from others.不要把自己孤立起来。
• We should never isolate ourselves from the masses.我们永远不能脱离群众。

4 isolated   

adj.与世隔绝的

参考例句：

• His bad behaviour was just an isolated incident. 他的不良行为只是个别事件。
• Patients with the disease should be isolated. 这种病的患者应予以隔离。

5 promising   

adj.有希望的，有前途的

参考例句：

• The results of the experiments are very promising.实验的结果充满了希望。
• We're trying to bring along one or two promising young swimmers.我们正设法培养出一两名有前途的年轻游泳选手。

6 utterly   

adv.完全地，绝对地

参考例句：

• Utterly devoted to the people,he gave his life in saving his patients.他忠于人民，把毕生精力用于挽救患者的生命。
• I was utterly ravished by the way she smiled.她的微笑使我完全陶醉了。

7 regain   

vt.重新获得，收复，恢复

参考例句：

• He is making a bid to regain his World No.1 ranking.他正为重登世界排名第一位而努力。
• The government is desperate to regain credibility with the public.政府急于重新获取公众的信任。

8 rehabilitation   

n.康复，悔过自新，修复，复兴，复职，复位

参考例句：

• He's booked himself into a rehabilitation clinic.他自己联系了一家康复诊所。
• No one can really make me rehabilitation of injuries.已经没有人可以真正令我的伤康复了。

9 felon   

n.重罪犯；adj.残忍的

参考例句：

• He's a convicted felon.他是个已定罪的重犯。
• Hitler's early "successes" were only the startling depredations of a resolute felon.希特勒的早期“胜利 ”，只不过是一个死心塌地的恶棍出人意料地抢掠得手而已。

10 felons   

n.重罪犯( felon的名词复数 )；瘭疽；甲沟炎；指头脓炎

参考例句：

• Aren't those the seats they use for transporting convicted felons? 这些坐位不是他们用来押运重犯的吗？ 来自电影对白
• House Republicans talk of making felons out of the undocumented and those who help them. 众议院共和党议员正商议对未登记的非法移民以及包庇他们的人课以重罪。 来自互联网

11 deter   

vt.阻止，使不敢，吓住

参考例句：

• Failure did not deter us from trying it again.失败并没有能阻挡我们再次进行试验。
• Dogs can deter unwelcome intruders.狗能够阻拦不受欢迎的闯入者。

12 deterring   

v.阻止，制止( deter的现在分词 )

参考例句：

• However, investors say are a number of issues deterring business. 然而，投资者表示，有很多问题让他们却步。 来自互联网
• It's an effective way of deterring potential does online, the logic goes. 逻辑上这是抑制潜在线上威胁的有效方法。 来自互联网

13 abiding   

adj.永久的，持久的，不变的

参考例句：

• He had an abiding love of the English countryside.他永远热爱英国的乡村。
• He has a genuine and abiding love of the craft.他对这门手艺有着真挚持久的热爱。